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Bradley Ramsey's avatar

WOW! As always, when I think I’ve read your best work, you somehow do something that becomes my new favorite. I imagine this will be an ongoing trend, but I am here for it!

The dual story here between the future and past is an incredible structural choice, but the way you used the microphone and music to deliver the message is where the real genius comes into play.

Music (and by extension poetry in general) trascends the words on the page to convey invisible emotions, and you’ve used that aspect here incredibly well.

I particularly loved the ending where we are reminded that, at nine years old, our world is small and fragile. To be told everything is your fault is nothing short of a personal apocalypse. It’s an incredible shift in perspective in an already phenomenal story. Absolutely amazing work!

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Maryellen Brady 💗📚's avatar

You created a compelling story, all within a song...my gosh this is 😍 😭 amazing!!!!

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