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Pages After Dark's avatar

“I will find a way to cheat Death” Alvina said as she dove into the water.

Ma’am, you sound like a character in a Final Destination movie. 😂

This was a great read!

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Mina Howell's avatar

😂😂 well I mean if you're an immortal archaeologist you can learn the secrets of EVERY civilization 😂

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Tamsin G.'s avatar

Mina! This is my first read of your work I believe!

I love that she just forgets her life before, to persue knowledge.

It's is so creative and fun, I can't wait to read more or your stuff.

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Mina Howell's avatar

Oh my gosh you picked a good one! I'm so glad you liked it and I'm so glad to have you here! 💕

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Tamsin G.'s avatar

Happy to be here! 😁

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L.G. Wells's avatar

Great job, Mina! I feel like there is a lot of you in this story. I could feel your passion for the ideas, and sensed some places where you were speaking through your characters. Great story! I would love to read more!

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Mina Howell's avatar

Thank you so much! 🥰

We definitely have some of the same ideas 😅

I really love how this one turned out, I might continue this story in some way 💕

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Bradley Ramsey's avatar

Wow Mina, this was amazing! An incredible level 3 response to the prompt that expertly wove in all of the prompt’s elements and many others as well.

I loved the back-and-forth with the flashback midway through the piece. The context really made the entire journey feel more impactful.

I also loved how you jumped right into the action at the beginning. The hook was sublime.

Top it off with the incredible lore and worldbuilding around the portal and the snake, and you’ve got yourself a winner here!

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Mina Howell's avatar

I'm so glad you like it! I'm really obsessed with this world right now, I might do a drawing to accompany it 😅

I tried so many new things and I'm so happy that it seems to be working out!

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Maryellen Brady 💗📚's avatar

Omgosh this is my favorite story you have written. My stomach was so tight about the archeologists & about the cliff crumbling. And then the magic of the snake just sparkled!!!

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Mina Howell's avatar

Really?! 🥰🥰

This story marked a lot of firsts for me, so I'm really glad you like it! I put soo much work into it lol

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Maryellen Brady 💗📚's avatar

Yes really! This is too notch in all departments. Pacing, setting, dialogue, tension, theme….everything!

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Mina Howell's avatar

Thank you so much! 😭 I'm going to cry

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Maryellen Brady 💗📚's avatar

It is soooooo good!

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